11-01-2011, 09:53 AM
There's some parts I like and some parts I think could be done different, I'll explain below.
First off, I don't think that you should start by saying how all the old IN-servers shut down, it makes the shard seem like an instable place, and makes people think that thisone will shut down too. Instead focus on that it's been around for a long time and that the shard has had a long time to develop this "amazing feeling" that Imagine Nation has, and that the community has stuck with it for all these years. At least I think that would give a more positive feel to it.
Secondly, the shard that Imagine Nation merged with is not named "UOX", it's named "XUO". Easy thing to mix up but worth fixing if you're keeping that part
There's also a few spelling errors but you said that you'd fix those so I'm not going to comment on that
Except for that, well done! I like the music, the in-game footage and the way you let players know what makes IN stand out from all the other shards out there.
First off, I don't think that you should start by saying how all the old IN-servers shut down, it makes the shard seem like an instable place, and makes people think that thisone will shut down too. Instead focus on that it's been around for a long time and that the shard has had a long time to develop this "amazing feeling" that Imagine Nation has, and that the community has stuck with it for all these years. At least I think that would give a more positive feel to it.
Secondly, the shard that Imagine Nation merged with is not named "UOX", it's named "XUO". Easy thing to mix up but worth fixing if you're keeping that part
There's also a few spelling errors but you said that you'd fix those so I'm not going to comment on that
Except for that, well done! I like the music, the in-game footage and the way you let players know what makes IN stand out from all the other shards out there.